you have good style, you have good voice
1. but as a suggestion if you slow down a bit because speedy speech looks more like as in a student function. so you have to transform yourself from student speaker to political speaker
2. rather than touching things like religious party person (gairat etc) kindly focus more on the problems of a common man, education, health care, justice, corruption etc. start from the common problem and at the end you can touch points of eman and gairat that will be a better composition i think
but i must say you have good voice, i liked your passion and it was a good short speech just prepare yoruself for the long ones as and more like a political leader.